Friday, 5 August 2011

Progress

She turns to her children
who lie silent-curled beside her,
their bodies bloated with
someone else’s shame.

‘My little ones,’ she says,
her lips as dry as crusts.
‘The clever people have
found water on Mars.’

© Fran Hill

Mars: Nasa images show signs of flowing water
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Fran lives in the West Midlands (UK). She teaches English in a local secondary school, writes, performs, blogs, tweets and tries to resist chocolate.

18 comments:

  1. Brilliant poem - what a world of contrasts we live in, where thousands starve while spaceships go to Jupiter.

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  2. Thanks, Gabrielle. I'm not sure if you're UK based, but somewhere here won £161 million on the Lottery. That kind of bizarre sharing out of money in our world also staggers me.

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  3. All that pathos and irony generated by just a one-word title and eight short lines - a sharp slap to reevaluate priorities. Very efficient and effective.

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  4. Thanks, Bavo. Appreciate your comment.

    Gabrielle - I see from your blog you're in Australia, not UK based. I should have looked first time!

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  5. it sums it up extremely well Fran. There are so many things wrong with priorities.

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  6. Excellent. This is what Poetry24 is all about. Snap-shot poetry. And here is proof that snap-shots can be high art.

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  7. Charlotte - thanks for your comment. Sometimes I think we have a very topsy-turvy world when it comes to this sort of thing.

    Alan - that's kind of you, sir. I think any writing should create images immediately, and that's what I tried to do here.

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  8. And there's the trouble with the world in a nutshell...

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  9. I am so glad to have come here to read your words.
    I always suspected you had it in you and now I know for certain.

    It's a horrible world we live in.

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  10. Wow. Brilliant, powerful words.

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  11. Thanks to Steve, Friko and Talli for your comments. And for coming over to have a look at the poem.

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  12. Succinct. Powerful. Gave me goosebumps!

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  13. Thanks, fishducky. Appreciated.

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  14. Very powerful images created by powerful words. Sent a shiver down my spine.

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  15. Brilliant - gave me goosebumps.

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  16. Very powerful stuff. Brilliant.

    Anna :o]

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  17. Thanks for all the comments, everyone. Sorry - was on holiday so only just caught up!

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  18. we need to hear voices like this
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tqfvUA2vRAM

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